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The switch
I am in the crowed cheering for Ronaldo. Payet passes it to Ronaldo he goes out to receive the ball. He got it and crosses it but he is going to fast he is running towed the ball boy. He crashed into the ball boy they both switch bodies they are both dizzy.
They wake up in the morning and they have switched
bodies. They wake up and they are in the wrong bed
room. They both look out the window and then they both look in the
mirror. They scream aaaa the ball boy said am I Ronaldo? Then he pulled his t shirt up and looked at his abs. Dam Daniel he said they both go down stairs and then Ronaldo went into the kitchen. He said what is going on here and then they said nothing. So he got the keys to the shiny car. But not Ronaldo’s car it was so rusty. Then they both went to training in there cool cars. The ball boy had the coolest car but then he crashed it when he got there. It was time for training his coach said what is up with your car? It was time for their games but they weren't vrsing each other they had some more games to go until they had their big game. So they can vs each other it was so close until they vs each other.
Thursday, August 11, 2016
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Ni Hao Wow you are good at using your punctuation and you are also good at getting the reader hooked into your writing. This reminds of when I went to watch a game. But how did Ronaldo change body's if they where totally different people? But next time I want to know more about Ronaldo and the ball boy? By Alex Cl
ReplyDeleteAlex Cl. Hello this is how you can change your name into a link and how to change it so it goes to your blog first you have to go to your name. This is just a practice. Then when you publish it you can have your name as a link to your blog.
ReplyDeleteHej Ezekiel. Good job on the switch story, it's the beat I've seen so far. You followed your WALT really well. It reminds me of fifa 15 the game. How much do you know about soccer? Auf Wiedersehen.
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